Hey y'all, Mom here. I wrote this morning, semi inspired by Fight Club, which I'm a little more than halfway through, and which I think is awesome. I don't really have a title yet, but it does involve Literal Shit. It's just kind of a fun thing, so post feedback if you want. I'm just curious what your reactions are :).
Have a good day!
Firstly, please tell me what you think of Fight Club when you finish it.
ReplyDeleteI see how the narrative voice was influenced by Fight Club's. You use the conversational style very well. A lot of times, first person narrative perspectives aren't well executed, but yours was.
Also, this story reminds a bit of the parable of the prodigal son but kind of in reverse because the one that stays home is the more messed up one in your story. And it also reminds me of the story of the Buddha when he leaves home to get enlightened and stuff.
I like your use of the different meanings of "shit," as in excrement or problems in our lives. Very cool.
I thought the way you use so many parentheses was funny and unique. "(although no one actually touches him, because they find when they get to the front of the line that he smells majestically terrible (which is why the line starts so far back from him, the smell))"
I finished Fight Club on Saturday morning and I LOVED it. Especially the writing style. I liked the first half better, before we knew who Tyler really was. Also, I was reading something online about books or whatnot, and they spoiled Tyler's identity for me when I was only 30 or so pages into the book...so that SUCKED.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I was definitely thinking about the Buddha when I wrote this. I know nothing of the prodigal son though. Murp.
I'm glad the parentheses worked. I used to use them a lot, when I thought the only trick to writing something funny was inserting parenthetical phrases.
Also, I realized how wonderful the whole Kenyon thing was...because a guy named TYLER was telling us about...you know. Genius.
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